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Swordsinger watched the advisers to sense their reaction.  He had pledged his sword and skills to the man called Sunrise Prince, both because it was right and because of the revenge it might bring him.  Many soldiers lay dead from his hand, but none were those who he'd personally sworn vengeance upon.  Inside he seethed at the injustice that they lived and laughed outside these walls, secure in the knowledge of their victory.   
 
Swordsinger watched the advisers to sense their reaction.  He had pledged his sword and skills to the man called Sunrise Prince, both because it was right and because of the revenge it might bring him.  Many soldiers lay dead from his hand, but none were those who he'd personally sworn vengeance upon.  Inside he seethed at the injustice that they lived and laughed outside these walls, secure in the knowledge of their victory.   
  
The army outside waited, a bloated and hungry thing.  The Sunrise Prince spoke truthfully; short of a reprieve from the Unconquered Sun himself, this castle would fall on the morrow.  
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The army outside waited, a bloated and hungry thing.  The Sunrise Prince spoke truthfully; short of a reprieve from the Unconquered Sun himself, this castle would fall on the marrow.  
  
 
But sometimes, you make your own miracles.   
 
But sometimes, you make your own miracles.   
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Experience told him otherwise.  This person wanted to be found.
 
Experience told him otherwise.  This person wanted to be found.
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“You are far from home, Nexian,” Copper Jaguar rumbled. “And while I doubt not that we meet here regarding a mutual interest, I fear we may not share a common purpose.” A grim smile touched his lips as he continued. “This would…disturb me.  Declare yourself – Do you stand with Mithric or Johr in the coming strife?”
 
“You are far from home, Nexian,” Copper Jaguar rumbled. “And while I doubt not that we meet here regarding a mutual interest, I fear we may not share a common purpose.” A grim smile touched his lips as he continued. “This would…disturb me.  Declare yourself – Do you stand with Mithric or Johr in the coming strife?”
  
A lesser man would have quailed under the Ardelethian’s stern gaze and the veiled threat that lay beneath it.  <s>But Little Ghost Wing had been raised to adulthood in the mean streets of Nexus and feared no man, neither lord nor villain.</s>  <i>But Little Ghost Wing, raised to adulthood in the harsh underworld of Nexus, was all too used to threats.</i> His smile twisted into a smirk as he replied to the Zenith’s query.
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A lesser man would have quailed under the Ardelethian’s stern gaze and the veiled threat that lay beneath it.  But Little Ghost Wing had been raised to adulthood in the mean streets of Nexus and feared no man, neither lord nor villain. His smile twisted into a smirk as he replied to the Zenith’s query.
 
 
<s>“Rest assured, my sympathies lay towards the Lord Mithric.  Were it not so, there would be little need for the army arrayed below.  Mithric would simply be discovered in his bed one morning with his throat slit.” His smile faded as he continued, his eyes gone cold and hard as paired moonsilver knives appeared in his hands as if by magic.  “But worry not, we share common cause – the succor of the good Lord Mithric.” Upon the Nexian’s brow appeared the glyph of the Night Caste, glowing softly with a white and purple radiance. “For as you can see, we three are brothers.”</s>
 
 
 
<i>"Rest assured, my friend, my sympathies lie with Lord Mithric.  If they didn't, I wouldn't be here talking to you.  Nor would Seftarian's army still be arrayed below, preparing to continue their siege.  And the Sunrise Prince..."  Copper Jaguar never saw the young man draw the curved, moonsilver knife that he now held up between them.  Ghost Wing's smile remained, but his eyes had turned cold and hard.  He knew a thing or two about threats himself.  "Well, let's just say the Sunrise Prince wouldn't be here anymore either."
 
  
"But worry not," he said brightly and sheathed his knife, "we share a common cause. And more than that, I think."  With that, the mark of the Night caste glimmered to life on Ghost Wing's brow, glowing softly with a white and purple radiance.</i>
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“Rest assured, my sympathies lay towards the Lord Mithric.  Were it not so, there would be little need for the army arrayed below.  Mithric would simply be discovered in his bed one morning with his throat slit.” His smile faded as he continued, his eyes gone cold and hard as paired moonsilver knives appeared in his hands as if by magic.  “But worry not, we share common cause – the succor of the good Lord Mithric.” Upon the Nexian’s brow appeared the glyph of the Night Caste, glowing softly with a white and purple radiance. “For as you can see, we three are brothers.”
  
 
Copper Jaguar’s smile broadened into one of genuine pleasure as he clasped the younger man’s forearm in friendship. The Nexian had impressed him with his courage, for fear was the mark of prey, not the predator. “Welcome, brother, and well met!”  The Zenith threw back his head as laughter shook his frame.  “I am Copper Jaguar, former brigand of Ardeleth and chosen priest of the Unconquered Sun.  It was he who bade me travel south to these Hundred Kingdoms in search of my brethren - blessed be his name!”  
 
Copper Jaguar’s smile broadened into one of genuine pleasure as he clasped the younger man’s forearm in friendship. The Nexian had impressed him with his courage, for fear was the mark of prey, not the predator. “Welcome, brother, and well met!”  The Zenith threw back his head as laughter shook his frame.  “I am Copper Jaguar, former brigand of Ardeleth and chosen priest of the Unconquered Sun.  It was he who bade me travel south to these Hundred Kingdoms in search of my brethren - blessed be his name!”  
  
“Indeed<i>... brother</i>,” replied Little Ghost Wing, his smile <s>returning</s> <i>widening</i> in light of the Ardelethian’s obvious pleasure. “Now, we only need find a way to deal with this army which complicates our visit with <s>the</s> Lord Mithric.” He turned to face Copper Jaguar.  “Would you like the thousand on the left or the thousand on the right?”
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“Indeed,” replied Little Ghost Wing, his smile returning in light of the Ardelethian’s obvious pleasure. “Now, we only need find a way to deal with this army which complicates our visit with the Lord Mithric.” He turned to face Copper Jaguar.  “Would you like the thousand on the left or the thousand on the right?”
  
 
"To be honest, neither.  These fools are being lead by the nose by the Lord Seftarian, who plays upon their fears as a bard would upon a lyre." Copper Jaguar shook his head in regret. "Yet I see little hope for peaceful resolution.  A blackheart like Johr would never consent to parlay, nor even to honorable combat between champions. Were Mithric to surrender himself, Johr would yet find cause to raze Aelysia to the ground and put its people to the sword, or worse." A shadow passed over his visage as the Zenith recalled the destruction of Ardeleth, its people enslaved by the Guild and victimized by the Fair Folk in the aftermath.
 
"To be honest, neither.  These fools are being lead by the nose by the Lord Seftarian, who plays upon their fears as a bard would upon a lyre." Copper Jaguar shook his head in regret. "Yet I see little hope for peaceful resolution.  A blackheart like Johr would never consent to parlay, nor even to honorable combat between champions. Were Mithric to surrender himself, Johr would yet find cause to raze Aelysia to the ground and put its people to the sword, or worse." A shadow passed over his visage as the Zenith recalled the destruction of Ardeleth, its people enslaved by the Guild and victimized by the Fair Folk in the aftermath.

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