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Marco held her close as they relaxed together. He felt her thin body shiver as it tried to draw even more warmth from him.  
 
Marco held her close as they relaxed together. He felt her thin body shiver as it tried to draw even more warmth from him.  
  
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He stood straight and gave her a squeeze. Brushing back one long bang he looked faced her eye to eye. "You're with me, now, Tala. Let's go for a walk."  
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He stood straight and gave her a squeeze. Brushing back one long bang he looked down as she looked up. "You're with me, now, Tala. Let's go for a walk."  
  
 
Tala looked confused. His words were like so many others, and she expected him to lead her somewhere private. Yet hand in hand he pulled her towards the tents. In a moment she was wrapped in his coat. Many tent vendors knew her. Some men gawked, several women scowled. Tala cringed a bit until Marco's strong arm rested across her shoulders and his hand squeezed her arm. Her mind stumbled when he said "My friend needs..." and her brain went into "yes sir" mode as Marco found various pieces of clothing for her. Warm clothes. Person clothes, not something you temporarily drape over an object.  
 
Tala looked confused. His words were like so many others, and she expected him to lead her somewhere private. Yet hand in hand he pulled her towards the tents. In a moment she was wrapped in his coat. Many tent vendors knew her. Some men gawked, several women scowled. Tala cringed a bit until Marco's strong arm rested across her shoulders and his hand squeezed her arm. Her mind stumbled when he said "My friend needs..." and her brain went into "yes sir" mode as Marco found various pieces of clothing for her. Warm clothes. Person clothes, not something you temporarily drape over an object.  

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