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===The Shallows ===
 
===The Shallows ===
  
In the Shallows individual thoughts take life. The variety is staggering, every creature is unique, ranging from entirely natural looking sea life to alien forms never witnessed outside the tribe. Similar thoughts band together in enormous schools, shoals and colonies ranging from a few dozen members to swarms that stretch for miles.  
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In the Shallows individual thoughts take life. The verity is staggering, every creature is unique and range from entirely natural looking sea life to alien forms never scene outside the tribe. Similar thoughts band together in enormous schools, shoals and colonies ranging from a few dozen members to swarms that stretch for miles.  
  
At a first glance the Shallows are beautiful, with brightly coloured creatures, graceful kelp fields and multihued piles of rocks and sand arranged in dazzling patterns all lit by a roiling light which seems to come from the water itself. Even at this low depth this beauty is just a façade (a popular theory says that like the minds that form it, the Shallows tries to put its best face forward). In the Shallows, the real dangers lay hidden in crevasses or disguised amongst the seaweed.  
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At a first glance the Shallows are beautiful, with brightly coloured creatures, graceful kelp fields and multihued piles of rocks and sand arranged in dazzling patterns all lit by a roiling light which seems to come from the water itself. Even at this low depth this beauty is just a façade (a popular theory says that like the minds that form it, the Shallows try to put it's best face forward). In the Shallows, the real dangers lay hidden in crevasses or disguised amongst the seaweed.  
  
 
Of all the Rift it is the shallows that closest resembles the web of life found in the ocean. Here thoughts of rest, of contentment or of safety form vast coral reefs floating free through the depths. Predatory swarms born from thoughts of hunger are a persistent danger while schools of fear and secrecy watch from hidden recesses.  
 
Of all the Rift it is the shallows that closest resembles the web of life found in the ocean. Here thoughts of rest, of contentment or of safety form vast coral reefs floating free through the depths. Predatory swarms born from thoughts of hunger are a persistent danger while schools of fear and secrecy watch from hidden recesses.  
  
A “rift biologist” could spend lifetimes charting the interplay of species, wondering if understanding the ecosystem would reveal the inner workings of the mind, but to most Leviathans the Shallows, for all its teeming forms of life, is an empty place lacking the ancient lore and secrets found deeper within the Rift.
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A “rift biologist” could spend lifetimes charting the interplay of species, wondering if understanding the ecosystem would reveal the inner workings of the mind but to most Leviathans the Shallows, for all it's teeming forms of life, is an empty place lacking the ancient lore and secrets found deeper within the Rift.  
  
 
===The Second Depth ===
 
===The Second Depth ===

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