Editing Midnight RPG - Chapter 12.24 (section)

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Thanks a lot Kevin!  This is awesome!!
 
I edited some minor typos this morning, and again when I added to it just now.  I'm unclear about this portion however:
"''He toils his time with the stars, leaving before the initiates that are to become during HIS ritual on the moon. He twists in plots contending on meaningless whelps making their way to us from the ShadowWall... ''"
 
Is she referring to the initiates as "the initiates-that-are-to-become" as a single long-winded term?  Is his ritual on the moon or is he leaving before the 'moon (as a shortened term for the New Moon or whatever phase that they understand as her meaning), which is when the ritual takes place?<br>
She said that his plots contend on whelps, which means "conflicting/fighting/rivaling on whelps."  I don't think this is a proper use of the word.  Should that be depending instead of contending?  Or should it be "contending with"?