Editing Talk:Qwixalted/Sunrise of the River Kingdoms (section)

= Etiquette =

Hi guys, I figured we should discuss a few standards of etiquette so as to decide how best to work out this game.

It's usually impolite to god-mod and control other people's characters, but I figure that in a play-by-post context, in a wiki format, this isn't necessarily a bad thing if it doesn't go too far and drives the story forward. It can be hard to maintain the momentum of a story, so allowing liberties to be taken with our characters -- and indeed, with NPCs -- can be a good thing, as long as it is done in a spirit of good faith and generosity for the story.

So what I mean is, for example, when you're having a conversation with a NPC of mine, I don't mind you playing out the "other side" of the conversation, as long as it is done in the right spirit.

Sometimes, differences will arise about liberties taken, and that's fine -- this is a wiki, after all, so it makes it easy to edit things. :)

In that case, you should replace inappropriate stuff with a strikeout: <s>like this</s>.

''For example:''

I'm playing out a conversation between a PC and a NPC, as the Storyteller. Wanting to portray the NPC as particularly annoying and abrasive, I imply that the PC is losing his or her temper.

''At the Seftarian ambassador's suggestion, Mithric turns to face him, furious, his voice raised and angry. "Exile? Are you out of your mind? Do you seek to offend me? My ancestors fought for this land! Fought and died! I will not run away!"''

Chronicler decides he doesn't like this, so he strikes out the offending paragraph and replaces it so:

<s>''At the Seftarian ambassador's suggestion, Mithric turns to face him, furious, his voice raised and angry. "Exile? Are you out of your mind? Do you seek to offend me? My ancestors fought for this land! Fought and died! I will not run away!"''</s>

''At the Seftarian ambassador's suggestion, Mithric turns to face him, coldly. Despite the anger he feels, he keeps his voice under control, calm and determined. "Flee into exile? Ambassador, please, when you return to your King, let him be under no illusion: I would rather die than run away. But I think he knows this already, and your 'offer' is intended only as an offense."''

(Or maybe he even accepts exile and runs away, to reclaim his throne later! Who knows? It's your story as much as it is mine!)

P.S. That may or may not be a sneak preview, depending on how you guys play out Chapter 1 ;)

Anyway, a few basic ground rules:

'''0. Always sign in when you make a wiki-edit, so your edits are tracked by name.'''

'''1. Anyone is free to strike anything out and edit-replace it as they see fit.'''

'''2. But. As Storyteller, I reserve the right to remove material from the final edit. In other words, tidying up for clarity's sake is my job, and I don't want it confused by letting you guys take that on. Apart from minor typos and other such edits, you should never remove something without striking it out and letting me do the final editting.'''

(lemma) Unless it's your own material, of course. You're free to edit your own contributions as much as you want, naturally, although do everyone else if time has passed between edits.

'''3. If there's a disagreement about how a particular edit/paragraph should go, mediation is also my responsibility as Storyteller.'''

Hope everything is clear? Clear-ish? Don't hesitate to ask if you have any questions!

P.P.S. I'm not obsessing about Mithric, really. ;P He's just an easy hook to tie a lot of this on. I want everyone to get a fair shout in everything.
--[[User:Aprogressivist|Aprogressivist]] 18:06, 22 December 2010 (UTC)

== Chapter 1 Notes ==

I've divided chapter 1 into two "parts". Part A consists of the party on the walls, which includes the Sunrise Prince and anybody else who wants to be there. Part B consists of anyone who wants to be there; I think it would be cool for at least two PCs to be in Part B. Then we can use the unification of the party as the vehicle to drive Chapter 1. The idea of a small group of Celestials coming to the rescue and getting into the citadel despite there being an army in the way could be quite cool.

(Note: you don't have to fight your way through... there's other possible solutions too! Though if you want to start the slashing... be my guest!)

That being said, if no-one is interested in being in Part B, or if you think the narrative structure I am trying to impose just doesn't work, we'll just quietly drop that side and focus on a Council of War in part A. :)

--[[User:Aprogressivist|Aprogressivist]] 18:27, 22 December 2010 (UTC)