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''He nods sagely at his son. He speaks, and his voice is deep and powerful and melodious – it contains strength and compassion, but also melancholy..
 
''He nods sagely at his son. He speaks, and his voice is deep and powerful and melodious – it contains strength and compassion, but also melancholy..
 
”Do not resist your teachings, my son. The techniques are within your grasp – they are part of your being. Just breathe in, in the presence of your forefathers, and the purity of your cause will bring you enlightenment.”''
 
”Do not resist your teachings, my son. The techniques are within your grasp – they are part of your being. Just breathe in, in the presence of your forefathers, and the purity of your cause will bring you enlightenment.”''
 
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''”It is too much!”Up on his feet again, Kid Diablo stares up at his father. He is choking on tears of rage and frustration. ”It is too. Much! I cannot fight like this, I – every time that I am in the challenges, I – ”''
''”It is too much!”Up on his feet again, Kid Diablo stares up at his father. He is choking on tears of rage and frustration.  
 
 
 
”It is too. Much! I cannot fight like this, I – every time that I am in the challenges, I – ”''
 
 
 
 
''His father remains silent.''
 
''His father remains silent.''
 
 
''”… I… it´s so close… and I lose control… and I…” ''
 
''”… I… it´s so close… and I lose control… and I…” ''
 
 
''Eyes filling up with tears, he makes a half-hearted motion to wipe them away with the back of his clenched fist.''
 
''Eyes filling up with tears, he makes a half-hearted motion to wipe them away with the back of his clenched fist.''
 
''After a few more moments of silence, El Diablo Grande speaks:''
 
''After a few more moments of silence, El Diablo Grande speaks:''
 
 
''”This is what you must learn to do, my son. This is what we are, the men of our line. We are the Luchador – bringers of justice, defenders of the weak. We can not abandon our nature.”
 
''”This is what you must learn to do, my son. This is what we are, the men of our line. We are the Luchador – bringers of justice, defenders of the weak. We can not abandon our nature.”
 
 
He kneels down before his son – still almost twice his height – and puts an enormous hand on his shoulder.''
 
He kneels down before his son – still almost twice his height – and puts an enormous hand on his shoulder.''
 
 
''”And the greatest enemy that you must conquer is yourself. Ponder this:”''
 
''”And the greatest enemy that you must conquer is yourself. Ponder this:”''
  

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