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There is a dull thump as he hits the asphalt – the speed is enough to make him bounce off it at an angle, smacking down again hard a little over a second and thirty meters later, pain screaming through his bones as he leaves a long trail, sliding across the snow-covered road.
 
There is a dull thump as he hits the asphalt – the speed is enough to make him bounce off it at an angle, smacking down again hard a little over a second and thirty meters later, pain screaming through his bones as he leaves a long trail, sliding across the snow-covered road.
  
We move in close to his face – most of it covered by the green and black Luchador mask, we can still see that KID DIABLO LOCO is exhausted, in pain. That pale Black Crow Brigadier freak´s attack hit him harder than most things that has hit him before. His dark eyes blink once, slowly, and a multitude of snowflakes are reflected in their depths.
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We move in close to his face – most of it covered by the green and black Luchador mask, we can still see that KID DIABLO LOCO is exhausted, in pain. That pale Black Crow Brigadier freak´s attack hit him harder than most things that has hit him before. His dark eyes blink once, slowly, and amultitude of snowflakes are reflected in their depths.
  
 
He is vaguely aware of the fight going on still – people screaming. The Brigadiers tearing into those waywards as he was lying spread-eagled on the cold and snowy ground. In his mind, he was already up on his feet. In his mind, he could feel the strength returning to his limbs, flowing into his legs and carrying him right into the middle of the fray – fast – and as he gave in to that lava flow boiling up inside of him, as he let just a little of all the shame and pain and rage and shit leak out he could see himself tearing into them like a terror from –  
 
He is vaguely aware of the fight going on still – people screaming. The Brigadiers tearing into those waywards as he was lying spread-eagled on the cold and snowy ground. In his mind, he was already up on his feet. In his mind, he could feel the strength returning to his limbs, flowing into his legs and carrying him right into the middle of the fray – fast – and as he gave in to that lava flow boiling up inside of him, as he let just a little of all the shame and pain and rage and shit leak out he could see himself tearing into them like a terror from –  
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''- a village. All white little houses and trailers, Mexican-style buildings in organic little clumps. Children are playing with a dog in the street, older people lazily eyeing them from their perches in sunchairs andfrom  under the precious shadows of their sunroofs. Here and there, more of the huge cacti are growing. ''
 
''- a village. All white little houses and trailers, Mexican-style buildings in organic little clumps. Children are playing with a dog in the street, older people lazily eyeing them from their perches in sunchairs andfrom  under the precious shadows of their sunroofs. Here and there, more of the huge cacti are growing. ''
  
''There is only one thing off about the whole scene; everyone is masked. To a man, child and – yeah, even the street dog – they are all wearing brightly colored, individual Luchador masks. Other than that, it´s like every cliché you´ve ever imagined about that type of sleepy Mexican desert village.''
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''There is only one thing off about the whole scene; everyone is masked. To a man, child and – yeah, even the street dog – they are all weawring brightly colored, individual Luchador masks. Other than that, it´s like every cliché you´ve ever imagined about that type of sleepy Mexican desert village.''
 
''Well, with the possible exception for the large wrestling ring up in the center of the village, where the eye of the camera drifts. That and the huge circle of Aztec-styled totem pillars that surrounds it.''
 
''Well, with the possible exception for the large wrestling ring up in the center of the village, where the eye of the camera drifts. That and the huge circle of Aztec-styled totem pillars that surrounds it.''
  
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''He nods sagely at his son. He speaks, and his voice is deep and powerful and melodious – it contains strength and compassion, but also melancholy..
 
''He nods sagely at his son. He speaks, and his voice is deep and powerful and melodious – it contains strength and compassion, but also melancholy..
 
”Do not resist your teachings, my son. The techniques are within your grasp – they are part of your being. Just breathe in, in the presence of your forefathers, and the purity of your cause will bring you enlightenment.”''
 
”Do not resist your teachings, my son. The techniques are within your grasp – they are part of your being. Just breathe in, in the presence of your forefathers, and the purity of your cause will bring you enlightenment.”''
 
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''”It is too much!”Up on his feet again, Kid Diablo stares up at his father. He is choking on tears of rage and frustration. ”It is too. Much! I cannot fight like this, I – every time that I am in the challenges, I – ”''
''”It is too much!”Up on his feet again, Kid Diablo stares up at his father. He is choking on tears of rage and frustration.  
 
 
 
”It is too. Much! I cannot fight like this, I – every time that I am in the challenges, I – ”''
 
 
 
 
''His father remains silent.''
 
''His father remains silent.''
 
 
''”… I… it´s so close… and I lose control… and I…” ''
 
''”… I… it´s so close… and I lose control… and I…” ''
 
 
''Eyes filling up with tears, he makes a half-hearted motion to wipe them away with the back of his clenched fist.''
 
''Eyes filling up with tears, he makes a half-hearted motion to wipe them away with the back of his clenched fist.''
 
''After a few more moments of silence, El Diablo Grande speaks:''
 
''After a few more moments of silence, El Diablo Grande speaks:''
 
 
''”This is what you must learn to do, my son. This is what we are, the men of our line. We are the Luchador – bringers of justice, defenders of the weak. We can not abandon our nature.”
 
''”This is what you must learn to do, my son. This is what we are, the men of our line. We are the Luchador – bringers of justice, defenders of the weak. We can not abandon our nature.”
 
 
He kneels down before his son – still almost twice his height – and puts an enormous hand on his shoulder.''
 
He kneels down before his son – still almost twice his height – and puts an enormous hand on his shoulder.''
 
 
''”And the greatest enemy that you must conquer is yourself. Ponder this:”''
 
''”And the greatest enemy that you must conquer is yourself. Ponder this:”''
  
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He might never be a great Luchador, but for the moment it would have to do.
 
He might never be a great Luchador, but for the moment it would have to do.
 
 
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