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The social system was good, but no one ''really'' wanted to take in a burden of a girl, and she inevitably slipped through the cracks. If not for Cutty, a disgraced cybersurgeon stripped of his license and living on the streets of new city, things might have ended badly for her.
 
The social system was good, but no one ''really'' wanted to take in a burden of a girl, and she inevitably slipped through the cracks. If not for Cutty, a disgraced cybersurgeon stripped of his license and living on the streets of new city, things might have ended badly for her.
  
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Instead a whole new world opened up - a world where the liabilities of her life had the potential to become assets.
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Instead a whole new world opened for her - a world where the liabilities of her life had the potential to become assets.
  
 
She learned computers and machines, building and fixing them as easy as breathing.
 
She learned computers and machines, building and fixing them as easy as breathing.
  
 
She would come to understand Cutty and the other familiar adults that drifted in and out of her life were criminals, but by then they were also family, and the real criminals were the ones despoiling the world around her for profit.
 
She would come to understand Cutty and the other familiar adults that drifted in and out of her life were criminals, but by then they were also family, and the real criminals were the ones despoiling the world around her for profit.

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