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Rivers clenched a fist before him and closed his eyes.  Momentarily, wisps of blue essence began to flit from between his closed fingers and under his thumb, slowly filling the room with ethereal light.  Erkum looked at him with barely concealed envy, slowly stroking his beard.
 
Rivers clenched a fist before him and closed his eyes.  Momentarily, wisps of blue essence began to flit from between his closed fingers and under his thumb, slowly filling the room with ethereal light.  Erkum looked at him with barely concealed envy, slowly stroking his beard.
  
Rivers opened his eyes to the full glory of the hall, but he ignored the ornaments and architecture, instead focusing on the pentagram in the center of the chamber.  “That’s definitely no second-circle demon cage.  There must be god’s ransom in starmetal just in the essence transformer shields.  Maybe your story…”
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Rivers opened his eyes to full glory of the hall, but he ignored the ornaments and architecture, instead focusing on the pentagram in the center of the chamber.  “That’s definitely no second-circle demon cage.  There must be god’s ransom in starmetal just in the essence transformer shields.  Maybe your story…”
  
 
But at that moment, his voice was drowned out by two simultaneous sounds.  One was the sound of Unbreakable Faith screaming its song of doom.  The other was a voice that came from Erkum’s side, as the neomah’s head rotated to an impossible angle, tearing its own flesh and bone as it did so.  Its mouth opened so wide that the jaw ripped loose as a blast erupted from its open jaws, nearly deafening them and causing the fragile walls of ice around them to crack and groan.  Indeed, it spoke, if such a tearing in the fabric of air could be called speech, the howl of a mad god-maker from beyond the edge of creation.
 
But at that moment, his voice was drowned out by two simultaneous sounds.  One was the sound of Unbreakable Faith screaming its song of doom.  The other was a voice that came from Erkum’s side, as the neomah’s head rotated to an impossible angle, tearing its own flesh and bone as it did so.  Its mouth opened so wide that the jaw ripped loose as a blast erupted from its open jaws, nearly deafening them and causing the fragile walls of ice around them to crack and groan.  Indeed, it spoke, if such a tearing in the fabric of air could be called speech, the howl of a mad god-maker from beyond the edge of creation.

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