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"Dance away, demon.  Whatever he has done, he is not for you."  Sweet Brass touched her hand to her sword hilt.   
 
"Dance away, demon.  Whatever he has done, he is not for you."  Sweet Brass touched her hand to her sword hilt.   
  
"Is he for you, then, goddess?"  Stanewald smiled, and her smile was cruel.  "Small thing that you are, material, defiant of your station?"
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"Is he for you, then, goddess?"  Stanewald smiled, and her smile was cruel.  "Small thing that you are, material, defiant of your station"
  
 
"He is for his people, demon, and for mine."  There was steel behind Sweet Brass' voice.
 
"He is for his people, demon, and for mine."  There was steel behind Sweet Brass' voice.
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The goddess had only one chance: to use her Essence to Open the Army's Way and hope that someone - [[The Qinglong Alliance]], [[Rivers Between Us]], [[Choshu Ishi]], ''anyone'' - would be quick-witted, and quick-footed, enough to jump through to her aid.   
 
The goddess had only one chance: to use her Essence to Open the Army's Way and hope that someone - [[The Qinglong Alliance]], [[Rivers Between Us]], [[Choshu Ishi]], ''anyone'' - would be quick-witted, and quick-footed, enough to jump through to her aid.   
  
But as she raised her signal-horn to her lips, Sweet Brass got a clear look at the Legionaries kit and saw equipment that would have been the envy of the First Age; the crackling tips of Shock Pikes, the polished lenses of Discrete Essence Armor, and on their shoulders, their insignia. These were no ordinary Brass Legionaries; these were the Sun Guards, the personal forces of Sunipa, Patron of Soldiers, War Goddess of the East. 
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But as she raised her signal-horn to her lips, Sweet Brass got a clear look at the Legionaries kit and saw equipment that would have been the envy of the First Age; the crackling tips of Shock Pikes, the polished lenses of Discrete Essence Armor, and on their shoulders, their insignia.
  
The Sweet Voice of Brass and Glory lowered her horn.
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These were no ordinary Brass Legionaries; these were the Sun Guards, the personal forces of Sunipa, Goddess of Soldiers, War Goddess of the East.  The Sweet Voice of Brass and Glory lowered her horn.
  
 
And then she heard Sunipa's voice.  "Sweet Brass, can I see you in my office for a minute?"
 
And then she heard Sunipa's voice.  "Sweet Brass, can I see you in my office for a minute?"
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"Uhm..."  Sweet Brass glanced over her should, to the valley where Storm of Amber trained.   
 
"Uhm..."  Sweet Brass glanced over her should, to the valley where Storm of Amber trained.   
  
"The Sun Guards can take over for you.  They'll be no less dedicated, skilled or imposing than you yourself.  Your golden lord will be safe in their care."
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"The Sun Guards can take over for you.  They'll be no less dedicated, skilled of imposing than you yourself.  Your golden lord will be safe in their care."
  
 
"Well," Sweet Brass said, and before she could say anything more she was gone, called to Heaven by the Daimyo's Reveille.   
 
"Well," Sweet Brass said, and before she could say anything more she was gone, called to Heaven by the Daimyo's Reveille.   

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