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It was 3 am when the bell woke King Vance of Vulsara.  The officer of the day in the trump room was on the screen.  The look in his eyes was enough to get him out of bed.
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It was 3 am when the bell woke me.  The officer of the day in the trump room was on the screen.  The look in his eyes was enough to get me out of bed.
  
 
“Lieutenant, I am guessing you need me?”
 
“Lieutenant, I am guessing you need me?”
  
“Sir, uh.. I'm on duty in the Trump hall and I need you here immediately.  Also anyone else of the blood.  My next call is to Admiral Vander, followed by Captain Agrom.  “
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“Sir, uh.. Im on duty in the Trump hall and I need you here immediately.  Also anyone else of the blood.  My next call is to Admiral Vander, followed by Captain Agrom.  “
  
Turning to summon his uniform he added his sword just in case.
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Turning to summon my uniform I add my sword just in case.
  
“Is the world on fire?  I think I would know...Will 5 minutes be enough?”
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“Is the world on fire?  I thin I would know...Will 5 minutes be enough?”
  
 
He looks away, then back, “Uh...No sir, it won't”
 
He looks away, then back, “Uh...No sir, it won't”
  
Sensing the pattern he felt a wildly damaged person with a pattern imprint.  He noddded  and let the LT go.  
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Sensing the pattern I feel a wildly damaged person with a pattern imprint.  I nod and let the LT go.  
  
 
Pulling my deck I pull Vander's trump.
 
Pulling my deck I pull Vander's trump.
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Jaques turned out to have an arm and a foot twisted completely around, out of sockets and hanging loose.  While he went to regeneration chambers I went to the conference room.  The observation room was a long one where observers could watch 300 patients at a time.
 
Jaques turned out to have an arm and a foot twisted completely around, out of sockets and hanging loose.  While he went to regeneration chambers I went to the conference room.  The observation room was a long one where observers could watch 300 patients at a time.
  
Vander and Agrom, Candle and Celecat followed me in.  I settled in the command chair.  As everyone settled Agrom brought me coffee, a couple bagels and a shmere of lox and cream cheese.  A small cup of the Calrabon pepper sauce  and a bottle of Tabasco were of course next to the bagels.
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Vander and Agrom, Candle and Celecat followed me in.  I settled in the command chair.  As everyone settled Agrom brought me coffee, a couple beagals and a shmere of lox and cream cheese.  A small cup of the Calrabon pepper sauce  and a bottle of Tabasco were of course next to the beagals.
  
 
He sat with a similar plate.  Silence ruled the room.
 
He sat with a similar plate.  Silence ruled the room.
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Looking around the room.  I get nods all around.   
 
Looking around the room.  I get nods all around.   
  
“Agrom.  Call Diaganar.  Tell them We are going to do a whole room transfer of our Emergency center to to there.  They have plugs.  It shouldn't be a  problem.  It will bring the conference room “
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“Agrom.  Call Diaganar.  Tell them We are going to do a whole room transfer of our Emergency center to to there.  They have plugs.  It should't be a  problem.  It will bring the conference room “
  
 
Leaning back I have time to sip coffee and shmere a bagel.  Calrabon sauce then cream cheese.  Tabasco and cream cheese on the next.  No one talked as we each considered the enormity of our guests.   
 
Leaning back I have time to sip coffee and shmere a bagel.  Calrabon sauce then cream cheese.  Tabasco and cream cheese on the next.  No one talked as we each considered the enormity of our guests.   
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Vander interrupted the silence.  “We can think of Borlak in the big tank down there all we like but more importantly, the king needs to know that Shieldbreaker has changed hands,  In to the hand of a Tosian at that.”
 
Vander interrupted the silence.  “We can think of Borlak in the big tank down there all we like but more importantly, the king needs to know that Shieldbreaker has changed hands,  In to the hand of a Tosian at that.”
  
I nodded.  That fact had escaped me.
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I nodded.  That fact had escapped me.
  
 
“Get one of those mongols up here.”
 
“Get one of those mongols up here.”

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