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Finally, six months ago came Tommy's first race in a junior, semi-pro dirt track racing league. Donny - already a better mechanic than most adults - had torn down and bored out his brother's ride.  
 
Finally, six months ago came Tommy's first race in a junior, semi-pro dirt track racing league. Donny - already a better mechanic than most adults - had torn down and bored out his brother's ride.  
  
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During the race, the car caught fire and Tommy died. At least, that's what the people watching the race said and what coroner's inquest found.  
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During the race, the car caught fire. At least, that's what the people watching the race said and what the police report said. But the fire wasn't hot. And it didn't burn orange and red like a gasoline fire would. There were strange green and purple flames that left the car itself mostly unharmed but turned Tommy and all of the other organic materials inside into a smoking slurry.  
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But - in the part that was left out of the official reports - the fire wasn't hot. And it didn't burn orange and red like a gasoline fire would. There were strange green and purple flames that left the car itself mostly unharmed but turned Tommy and all of the other organic materials inside into a smoking slurry.  
 
  
 
Horace lost interest in Donny after that. Lost interest in most everything. He's currently somewhere in the process of drinking himself to death.
 
Horace lost interest in Donny after that. Lost interest in most everything. He's currently somewhere in the process of drinking himself to death.

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