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** The sentence implies that the cutting is the "Claws of Zardrix," but a cutting is an event, not a thing.  I don't understand how an event that is known could be "lost."
 
** The sentence implies that the cutting is the "Claws of Zardrix," but a cutting is an event, not a thing.  I don't understand how an event that is known could be "lost."
 
:  <font color=red>ANSWER:  This misunderstanding is because you don't know what the "Claws of Zardrix" references exactly.</font>
 
:  <font color=red>ANSWER:  This misunderstanding is because you don't know what the "Claws of Zardrix" references exactly.</font>
:: <font color="990066">Well, the pump is lost.  The "Claws" is/are lostMight be the same thingMight as well assume so for now.</font>
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:: <font color="990066">I don't think so.  I think the misunderstanding is grammatical.  It seems like the whole sentence could be re-written thus:<br>''"But the masters themselves may now fear knowing that the pump cut from her breast is long lost by the powers of those of Black Blood, this Claws of Zardrix is lost to mankind."''<br>It really just doesn't make much sense otherwise.  The issue here is that as it was first written, the object of the whole sentence was the "cutting" though it implies that it was the "pump." Of course, cutting can also refer to the refuse produced from pruning a tree, but that doesn't really apply to a thing like a dragon, and if this meaning is used then "cutting of the pump" would be incorrect - unless the claws of Zardrix refers to a branch cut from a tree that was planted in the dragon's heartSee what I mean?  I think the sentence just needs editing.</font>
  
  

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