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The soldiers and wood detail drew their weapons; closing ranks to face off with the Zenith. One, presumably their officer, a woman with short brown hair and pale blue eyes, barely into adulthood, stepped forward. Her good mail, sword and the thickness of her blue cloak suggested a minor noble's daughter, perhaps a young woman seeking to make her mark and fortune in this war.
 
The soldiers and wood detail drew their weapons; closing ranks to face off with the Zenith. One, presumably their officer, a woman with short brown hair and pale blue eyes, barely into adulthood, stepped forward. Her good mail, sword and the thickness of her blue cloak suggested a minor noble's daughter, perhaps a young woman seeking to make her mark and fortune in this war.
  
"Anathema, this land is claimed by King Seftarian by Right of Warfare! You trespass on the King's domain! Begone, or... or we shall remove you!" The young officer's voice betrayed a slight quaver of fear. It was one thing for man to march against man; quite another to face a demon. The soldiers <s>felt their leader's fear but they were also resolute</s> shared their leader's unease, yet found strength in her determination. The Immaculate doctrine taught them that the Anathema were contrary to all that was good and proper. This knowledge bred fear and terror, but could also steel their resolve in the face of the inevitable. As misguided as their bravery was, it was nonetheless admirable. The soldiers gripped their weapons, held in check by their officer as they awaited the Anathema's reaction...
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"Anathema, this land is claimed by King Seftarian by Right of Warfare! You trespass on the King's domain! Begone, or... or we shall remove you!" The young officer's voice betrayed a slight quaver of fear. It was one thing for man to march against man; quite another to face a demon. The soldiers felt their leader's fear but they were also resolute. The Immaculate doctrine taught them that the Anathema were contrary to all that was good and proper. This knowledge bred fear and terror, but could also steel their resolve in the face of the inevitable. As misguided as their bravery was, it was nonetheless admirable. The soldiers gripped their weapons, held in check by their officer as they awaited the Anathema's reaction...
  
 
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“Lady Arcadia!” Two soldiers moved to support their stricken commander, while a third drew his blade to defend his captain from the unseen threat. In this defensive posture, they retreated behind the wall of guardsmen now advancing on Copper Jaguar.
 
“Lady Arcadia!” Two soldiers moved to support their stricken commander, while a third drew his blade to defend his captain from the unseen threat. In this defensive posture, they retreated behind the wall of guardsmen now advancing on Copper Jaguar.
  
Shrouded by darkness and Essence, Little Ghost Wing had crept along outside the nimbus of the firelight, unseen and unheard by soldiers focused on the spectacle being provided by the Ardelethian. Yet, when the time came for him to make his throw, the young Nexian thief could not bring himself to slay such a lovely young woman, seemingly so full of promise.  Rather, he altered his aim to incapacitate, and his aim was true.  The young officer, though gravely wounded, would yet possibly survive this encounter.  Not so the guardsmen charging towards his Solar brother.
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Shrouded by darkness and Essence, Little Ghost Wing had crept along outside the nimbus of the firelight, unseen and unheard by soldiers focused on the spectacle being provided by the Ardelethian. Yet, when the time came for him to make his throw, the young Nexian thief could not bring himself to slay such a lovely young woman, seemingly so full of promise.  Rather, he altered his aim to incapacitate, and his aim was true.  The young officer, though gravely wounded, would yet possibly survive this encounter.  Not so the members of her guard charging towards his Solar brother.
  
A storm of blades rained down on the Seftarian warriors, their preternaturally sharp blades flickering in the firelight as they pierced mail, bone, and flesh.  Amid the confusion, several of the remaining score of soldiers, noting the direction from which the blades had originated, turned to face this new threat, momentarily forgetting the one already before them.
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A hailstorm of blades rained down on the guardsman, their preternaturally sharp blades flickering in the firelight as they pierced mail, bone, and flesh.  Amid the confusion, several of the remaining score of soldiers, noting the direction from which the blades had originated, turned to face this new threat, momentarily forgetting the one already before them.
  
 
Copper Jaguar surged forward with a feline grace, Arclight leaving contrails of Essence as it struck with celerity impossible to follow with mortal eyes.  A coruscant aura shone around him, manifesting in the form of a great cat slashing and tearing with claws of solar flame. Within the span of an instant, half a score of men lay dead at his feet.  He turned to the few that remained.
 
Copper Jaguar surged forward with a feline grace, Arclight leaving contrails of Essence as it struck with celerity impossible to follow with mortal eyes.  A coruscant aura shone around him, manifesting in the form of a great cat slashing and tearing with claws of solar flame. Within the span of an instant, half a score of men lay dead at his feet.  He turned to the few that remained.

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