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- am I making Exemplar too much of an obvious shitheel? I'm trying to paint him as an overprotective parent rather than out-and-out domineering type.  
 
- am I making Exemplar too much of an obvious shitheel? I'm trying to paint him as an overprotective parent rather than out-and-out domineering type.  
 
: I think he's just enough of an ass.  He's doing these '''terrible''' things, but I think they're all well within the range of what we can rehabilitate later.  I can imagine a scene where he explains, and where the audience buys his explanation, and sees him in a new light.  As long as we don't pass the point-of-no-return where that is no longer possible I think we're in good shape. [[User:TonyLB|TonyLB]] 18:27, 3 February 2006 (PST)
 
 
 
- how do we make Frost's kicking-out not seem abrupt?  
 
- how do we make Frost's kicking-out not seem abrupt?  
  
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---- [Miss fermoy ]I suppose they could do a psych evaluation of Milka, stating its just routine, then when he realises that a, she's still a bit nuts, and b, has feelings for Joel decides its best that she is hospitalised "until she feels better"
 
---- [Miss fermoy ]I suppose they could do a psych evaluation of Milka, stating its just routine, then when he realises that a, she's still a bit nuts, and b, has feelings for Joel decides its best that she is hospitalised "until she feels better"
 
: The other possibility for a non-abrupt carting off to the asylum is simply that we accept "Yes, this is now destined to happen," and leave it for another scene to have it actually happen (as Danny points out further down this page).  For instance, any scene where Milka is in the same room with Exemplar she has the possibility of freaking out in a disturbing and obviously not-well way.  It'd be '''really cool''' if Exemplar had a little "one on one talk" with Milka, and had to end up carting her off.  There's a great way to build trust in the team ... even if he's completely and totally right that she belongs in an institution. [[User:TonyLB|TonyLB]] 18:27, 3 February 2006 (PST)
 
  
 
----Well, the only SPARCs left uninvolved are Sarah and my character, so the SPARTA might try to enlist them in taking care of the dirty work -- either nicely "Help us help your friends", or nasty "Help us or you're gone too" or Machiavellianly "Help get rid of the troublemaker and we'll know you're ready to be a leader".  I personally like the Machiavellian approach for Amy, because it gives me a chance to firm up her mean-girl credibility, and it sets up a nice dynamic for next episode, when Amy realizes that she screwed over a friend just to clear the way for Joel.   
 
----Well, the only SPARCs left uninvolved are Sarah and my character, so the SPARTA might try to enlist them in taking care of the dirty work -- either nicely "Help us help your friends", or nasty "Help us or you're gone too" or Machiavellianly "Help get rid of the troublemaker and we'll know you're ready to be a leader".  I personally like the Machiavellian approach for Amy, because it gives me a chance to firm up her mean-girl credibility, and it sets up a nice dynamic for next episode, when Amy realizes that she screwed over a friend just to clear the way for Joel.   
 
: I'm not immediately sure whether Sarah would come down on the "Let's do it for the team!" side or the "Screw you, I don't betray my friends" side.  Or, rather, I'm sure that Sarah would fall on the "Screw you" side and Vigil would fall on the "Go team!" side, and I'm not at all sure which one would get dominance. [[User:TonyLB|TonyLB]] 18:27, 3 February 2006 (PST)
 
  
 
But do we need to both decide and wrap up everything in one scene?  It seems to me that we could resolve this scene with the big dogs deciding what to do and some of how to do it, and leave the scene where Frost gets hospitalized for later in the episode.  
 
But do we need to both decide and wrap up everything in one scene?  It seems to me that we could resolve this scene with the big dogs deciding what to do and some of how to do it, and leave the scene where Frost gets hospitalized for later in the episode.  

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