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Through the haze across the dance floor, by the booths and by the smashed boxes and their mixed contents strides a man who seems too narrow to glide on two legs. He wears long black pants over long skinny legs. His black coat over a white shirt makes him look almost formal. His head is topped my a black bowler hat that in no way makes him look elegant, it makes him look sinister. His dark purple eyes peek out and seem to track separately of each other. Dark clouds and grim humor shine from them, as if laughing at some private joke at the expense of someone else. Men see him and shiver as if a cold chill shrivels their manhood. Women blush as if their loins were suddenly warmed.
 
Through the haze across the dance floor, by the booths and by the smashed boxes and their mixed contents strides a man who seems too narrow to glide on two legs. He wears long black pants over long skinny legs. His black coat over a white shirt makes him look almost formal. His head is topped my a black bowler hat that in no way makes him look elegant, it makes him look sinister. His dark purple eyes peek out and seem to track separately of each other. Dark clouds and grim humor shine from them, as if laughing at some private joke at the expense of someone else. Men see him and shiver as if a cold chill shrivels their manhood. Women blush as if their loins were suddenly warmed.
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If he calls you a droogie, you know he sees you well.  If he say, "hola davotchaka, " he has other things in mind.
 
  
 
He is called Thin Whip. His brothers call him either slim, slick, or prick depending on which you ask. He is a Hendrake, a Helgram, a Sawall, and through his great, great grandfather a Bariman, thus he is of the blood of Amber. His father calls him bastard despite knowing his legitimacy. His mother named him Jurt.
 
He is called Thin Whip. His brothers call him either slim, slick, or prick depending on which you ask. He is a Hendrake, a Helgram, a Sawall, and through his great, great grandfather a Bariman, thus he is of the blood of Amber. His father calls him bastard despite knowing his legitimacy. His mother named him Jurt.
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Everyone wants to know him, everyone is afraid to be known by him. He arranges favors, takes bribes, introduces strangers, greets foes, plans assignations and discusses politics. He seems everywhere and knows everything.
 
Everyone wants to know him, everyone is afraid to be known by him. He arranges favors, takes bribes, introduces strangers, greets foes, plans assignations and discusses politics. He seems everywhere and knows everything.
  
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His pedigree gives him entrance into strange venues. He is the brother of Despil, the Ambassador to Amber from the Courts of Chaos. His brother Merlin is the Crown Prince of Avalon. His father is Gramble Sawall, and his mother is the indomitable Dara of the Lintros Clan of House Hendrake. He is the Heir of the House Sawall, since Mandor, Merlin, and Despil have all removed themselves from consideration for it. His great, great grandfather is Benedict, Marshal of Amber, and his great grand aunt is Doria. His great, great grand uncle is Random, King of Amber. He is even on the short list for the throne of the High Lord of Chaos itself. His resources in Chaos are incalculable; his resources in Amber are extraordinary. The chip on his shoulder is immense. His goals are unknown. His morals are questionable.
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His pedigree gives him entrance into strange venues. He is the brother of Despil, the Ambassador to Amber from the Courts of Chaos. His brother Merlin is the Crown Prince of Avalon. His father is Gramble Sawall, and his mother is the indomitable Dara of the Lintros Clan of House Hendrake. He is the Heir of the House Sawall, since Mandor, Merlin, and Despil have all removed themselves from consideration for it. His great, great grandfather is Benedict, Marshal of Amber, and his great grand aunt is Doria. His great, great grand uncle is Random, King of Amber. He is even on the short list for the throne of the High Lord of Chaos itself. His resources in Chaos are incalculable; his resources in Amber are extraordinary. The chip on his shoulder is immense. His goals are unknown. His morals are negligible.
  
 
He raises the Sign of the Logrus sometimes so that the people of Amber can see what it looks like, feel its power, and be lulled by its glory. He repulses some, some are shocked, and some are enamored.
 
He raises the Sign of the Logrus sometimes so that the people of Amber can see what it looks like, feel its power, and be lulled by its glory. He repulses some, some are shocked, and some are enamored.

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