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Through years of hard training, hard fighting and hard living, the captains and generals of the Empires armies began to see leadership qualities in Thunder. Firstly he survived where most others didn't. He seemed to show genuine care for the men in his unit and on several occasions risked his body to save another, or do drag a wounded comrade to safety. But most importantly, the couple of times when his squad leader fell in combat, Thunder would continue the attack and succeed. Proposing that Thunder be raised to the officer ranks, he had to demonstrate loyalty towards the empire, had to give an extra 5 years of service, and was required to follow any order he was given by his superiors. Knowing that life as an officer meant more privileges, but more importantly gave him the opportunity to save more of his people when other officers just saw them as meat to throw at the grinder, Thunder grabbed the opportunity, made the necessary oaths and agreed to a five year extension. | Through years of hard training, hard fighting and hard living, the captains and generals of the Empires armies began to see leadership qualities in Thunder. Firstly he survived where most others didn't. He seemed to show genuine care for the men in his unit and on several occasions risked his body to save another, or do drag a wounded comrade to safety. But most importantly, the couple of times when his squad leader fell in combat, Thunder would continue the attack and succeed. Proposing that Thunder be raised to the officer ranks, he had to demonstrate loyalty towards the empire, had to give an extra 5 years of service, and was required to follow any order he was given by his superiors. Knowing that life as an officer meant more privileges, but more importantly gave him the opportunity to save more of his people when other officers just saw them as meat to throw at the grinder, Thunder grabbed the opportunity, made the necessary oaths and agreed to a five year extension. | ||
− | rising quickly from squad leader, to platoon leader to company leader, rumours abounded that he was being groomed to become a possible district commander - possibly even the land where the people lived | + | rising quickly from squad leader, to platoon leader to company leader, rumours abounded that he was being groomed to become a possible district commander - possibly even the land where the people lived. all the soldiers serving under him loved him not because he was an easy commander, but because he was a fair commander, and was a superior tactician. You simply had a better chance to live when commanded by Thunder than with any other commander. |
− | The Proverbial straw that broke the camels back came during the campaign to suppress the northern rebellion. Leading 500 men, Thunder was ordered to take a heavily fortified town at all cost, and then execute all women and children as retribution for an ambush on a pilgrim caravan that happened a fortnight earlier. rumours abounded that the ambush was staged, that neither pilgrim nor rebels were involved and that this was just a pretext to commit genocide on a national level. Tactically assessing the fortified town, Thunder also realized that 500 men, while theoretically sufficient to take the town, the cost to his own men was too high, estimated at 90% losses. Seeing that his men | + | The Proverbial straw that broke the camels back came during the campaign to suppress the northern rebellion. Leading 500 men, Thunder was ordered to take a heavily fortified town at all cost, and then execute all women and children as retribution for an ambush on a pilgrim caravan that happened a fortnight earlier. rumours abounded that the ambush was staged, that neither pilgrim nor rebels were involved and that this was just a pretext to commit genocide on a national level. Tactically assessing the fortified town, Thunder also realized that 500 men, while theoretically sufficient to take the town, the cost to his own men was too high, estimated at 90% losses. Seeing that his men emphasized with these rebels, knowing that this "ambush" was just a pretext for legal genocide and disgusted in his leaderships lack of regard for his men’s welfare, Thunder decided at that point to desert en-mass with his men, lead them back to the land to be free. Knowing that he would put everyone in jeopardy with this plan, he asked his men if this was what they wanted. With a rousing cry, it was settled - free at last, but outlaw, deserter, and wanted. |
− | Quietly returning to his village, Thunder discovered that much had changed during his years away. | + | Quietly returning to his village, Thunder discovered that much had changed during his years away. His father had passed, most of his brothers and sisters were in other villages either through relocation or marriage. and he discovered a friendship with a woman only a few years past her name day which quickly blossomed into a hidden love. his people knowing that he was on the lam, looked out for him, harbored him, and warned Thunder whenever a representative of the Empire showed up. His military acumen is an asset that the village does not want to be without, and having one of her sons return, the village does not want to lose him again. |
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− | + | For the past several months, Thunder has quietly began thinking and plotting about the day when the Empire was no longer ruling over the people. His plans are not yet formulated, but he does know that the people can care for themselves much better than the empire can, that to break the yoke, a firm hand will be needed - but firstly, the people must know they are in the hands of a true leader, one who is looking after only their best wishes and is not secretly a dog of the empire - self serving their own interests in wealth over the suffrage of the people. Thunder took the ancient 'peoples oath' to demonstrate his intentions, and has only just begun traveling throughout his tribes lands, speaking to the villagers and farmers and letting the people know that there is someone who is starting to do something... | |
He is currently traveling, between farms, away from the village... | He is currently traveling, between farms, away from the village... | ||
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:*Please don't change the name, I like it just the way it is. | :*Please don't change the name, I like it just the way it is. | ||
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*The press gang's offer should be phrased more like this: Either you become an employee soldier for us, or we send you to the slave pits as property. Serve us willingly and we pay you or serve us unwillingly and we won't, but either way you WILL serve us. The standard "employment contract" would be 20 years, but it would be renewable at the discretion of the Authority. Membership in the Authority (the equivalent of citzenship) I'm thinking should not be explicitly on the table, but COULD be possible, more of a carrot for good service; maybe the Chairman-Dictator can hand out a small number of memberships each year. The Authority probably does this to all the surrounding groups, forming "Employee Regiments" from all over the place, and probably mixes them up; Thunder would have served with fellow soldiers from a number of different cultures, not just the People. In fact, the only caveat on Employee Regiments is that they NEVER serve in their own home lands; they only serve elsewhere. This also allows the Authority to fight a rebellion in one place with the possible rebels from another place, and commit few of their own people to the actual fight. This is like the British using troops from India to fight in the Boxer Rebellion in China. | *The press gang's offer should be phrased more like this: Either you become an employee soldier for us, or we send you to the slave pits as property. Serve us willingly and we pay you or serve us unwillingly and we won't, but either way you WILL serve us. The standard "employment contract" would be 20 years, but it would be renewable at the discretion of the Authority. Membership in the Authority (the equivalent of citzenship) I'm thinking should not be explicitly on the table, but COULD be possible, more of a carrot for good service; maybe the Chairman-Dictator can hand out a small number of memberships each year. The Authority probably does this to all the surrounding groups, forming "Employee Regiments" from all over the place, and probably mixes them up; Thunder would have served with fellow soldiers from a number of different cultures, not just the People. In fact, the only caveat on Employee Regiments is that they NEVER serve in their own home lands; they only serve elsewhere. This also allows the Authority to fight a rebellion in one place with the possible rebels from another place, and commit few of their own people to the actual fight. This is like the British using troops from India to fight in the Boxer Rebellion in China. | ||
*I'm thinking the desertion en-masse is a bit much, given the mixture of cultures. The Authority does not encourage sympathy among its employee regiments. But more importantly, what happened to the other soldiers? I suggest the following alternative; faced with the possible destruction of his entire unit in the process of genocide, Thunder led a mutiny against the senior officers, with the intent of leading the men into the wilderness to the North of the Authority (perhaps eventually returning to his own lands). The mutiny was successful, briefly, but then the Authority moved in several Banner regiments, who crushed the mutiny (the Authority carefully makes sure its member troops are better equipped than the employees), and Thunder barely escaped with his own life. | *I'm thinking the desertion en-masse is a bit much, given the mixture of cultures. The Authority does not encourage sympathy among its employee regiments. But more importantly, what happened to the other soldiers? I suggest the following alternative; faced with the possible destruction of his entire unit in the process of genocide, Thunder led a mutiny against the senior officers, with the intent of leading the men into the wilderness to the North of the Authority (perhaps eventually returning to his own lands). The mutiny was successful, briefly, but then the Authority moved in several Banner regiments, who crushed the mutiny (the Authority carefully makes sure its member troops are better equipped than the employees), and Thunder barely escaped with his own life. | ||
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*An interesting modification; you have the brand of an employee soldier, but not the brand of a PENSIONED or DISCHARGED employee soldier. Therefore, if you are ever captured and someone from the Authority gets a good look at your (name a body part), it will be obvious you are a deserter. You COULD forge the discharge brand, I suppose but I'm going to make you play that out and not let it be in the back story. :) | *An interesting modification; you have the brand of an employee soldier, but not the brand of a PENSIONED or DISCHARGED employee soldier. Therefore, if you are ever captured and someone from the Authority gets a good look at your (name a body part), it will be obvious you are a deserter. You COULD forge the discharge brand, I suppose but I'm going to make you play that out and not let it be in the back story. :) | ||
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*I'd like to put as much of the last two paragraphs as possible into the game instead of backstory. In other words, instead of saying "Thunder discovered much had changed", I think it would be fun to PLAY OUT Thunder discovering just how much has changed. Backstory isn't as much fun as play. Does that make sense?[[User:Skalchemist|Skalchemist]] 09:27, 25 August 2006 (PDT) | *I'd like to put as much of the last two paragraphs as possible into the game instead of backstory. In other words, instead of saying "Thunder discovered much had changed", I think it would be fun to PLAY OUT Thunder discovering just how much has changed. Backstory isn't as much fun as play. Does that make sense?[[User:Skalchemist|Skalchemist]] 09:27, 25 August 2006 (PDT) | ||
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