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Now she just had Kenjin. Her Sensei.  
 
Now she just had Kenjin. Her Sensei.  
  
One-legged old drunk could still put her on her back twice as often as she managed to put him on his. Probably. She hadn't actually sparred with him since she left the dirt for the ships and stations of the black.  
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One-legged drunk old whitehair could still put her on her back twice as often as she managed to put him on his. Probably. She hadn't actually sparred with him since she left the dirt for the ships and stations of the black.  
  
 
They still waved regular, though.
 
They still waved regular, though.

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