HorizonVirtual:RewritesAndRewriting
Master Rewrite Datapad
- Master Rewrite Datapad A-E
- Master Rewrite Datapad F-J
- Master Rewrite Datapad K-O
- Master Rewrite Datapad P-T
- Master Rewrite Datapad U-Z
Angie, I don't mind discussing it at all! Without spieolrs, of course! There were a few things, the two most major being that from that middle point on, I think the scenes just weren't tight enough. Too many secondary characters, too much stuff' not enough attention paid to the characters and the developing romance. The biggest issue though, was the conflict. The black moment was triggered by an external force (crazy ex-girlfriend, eg, plot device) rather than it coming from within my hero and heroine. Now, I think the reason I was asked for a rewrite, rather than being rejected at this point is that the internal conflict was there, it just wasn't the driving force of the story. So, by going back and reconstructing from there on, I was able to tighten scenes, bring forward one of the plot elements to add a twist' to the middle, emphasize their internal conflict, and the most important thing I did was remove the secondary characters that were manipulating things.In the original end I think they went to a party, crazy ex girlfriend (cegf) was there, and then she showed up later to cause trouble blah blah blah. When I did the rewrite I cut the other characters, the party, all of the stuff'. And I brought it back down to my H and h. The material was there, that internal conflict was there, but I'd been so focused on all that outside stuff, I'd used that to make drama and tension. Taking it away, it had to come from within my characters. Their issues came to the surface and they had to be dealt with. The plot stayed the same, scenes changed but followed a similar pattern, but the focus, more than anything changed. It went to the characters, the relationship. Oh, and I made the hotel more glamorous, moved it's location, and added a private island. Any more questions, feel free to ask!
